Okay... So this ain't exactly professionally written. It was a piece of fanfiction I wrote for Disney's, "The Lion King." In fact, the movie is one of the major things that got me writing in the first place. But I'd like to know your thoughts on this as a story.
I hope you'll like this, even if you don't like the movie.
I'd love to hear some constructive critisism from fellow Christians.
(But if the comment is about the formatting... I know. XD I didn't put it up there)
http://www.lionking.org/text/readstory.cgi?230One quick note. The name Aiheu is this pride's name for God.